Superjer Against Humanity Suggestions.
Superjer Against Humanity Suggestions.
NatureJay
SJA: Commander of Ruthless Abuse
2005 Mar 22 • 1871
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Yeah, that last'un bugged me because I knew that it could work but you'd have to tweak the way you say it each time, which seems like a bore. Or seems like someone just couldn't do it each time out and it would be a drag. But I REALLY want more play 1s with two blanks.
People glorify ____ except the ___ they might show on behalf of their nearest neighbors.
People glorify all reasons for ____ except the ___ they might show on behalf of their nearest neighbors.
The former is cleaner, but each iteration I seem to hastily come up with loses that feeling of variety.
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WAIT WAIT WAIT I GOT IT, you only need to move stuff around
People glorify ____ of all sorts except the ___ they might show on behalf of their nearest neighbors.
Or to rephrase it to make it less awkward
People glorify ____ in all its varieties except the ____ they might show on behalf of their nearest neighbors.
It's not perfect, but it's getting closer.
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2014 Apr 29 at 16:09 PDT
— Ed. 2014 Apr 29 at 16:15 PDT
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Nezumi said: To the stilled Earth say: '_'. To the rushing water speak: '_'.
This makes me even more want to include vocal style suggestions for some cards.
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2014 Apr 29 at 18:00 PDT
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NatureJay said: People glorify ____ in all its varieties except the ____ they might show on behalf of their nearest neighbors.
It's not perfect, but it's getting closer.
Do you need the "the" on the second blank? That's generally a no-no. Is it just for plurals?
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2014 Apr 29 at 18:01 PDT
— Ed. 2014 Apr 29 at 18:02 PDT
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NatureJay
SJA: Commander of Ruthless Abuse
2005 Mar 22 • 1871
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Nah, it can be cut, that was my oversight. I've just been really excited about the two blank onefer is all.
The original quote was "bravery" in the blanks, so you can see how it works...
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2014 Apr 29 at 18:20 PDT
— Ed. 2014 Apr 29 at 18:22 PDT
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Nezumi
Asshole Admin
2005 Mar 26 • 783
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SuperJer said: This makes me even more want to include vocal style suggestions for some cards.
"Intone this card reverently, like a king is burying his baby son."
Also, thinking about Jay's "Every man who is not _, _, or _ etc." card made me realize how good that format is for putting a verb/noun combo (like 'adopting a romanian baby') in the first space. It makes it sound like the verb applies to the other blanks. It works with some other cards too, like "...a refreshing douche of sprite, more blood, or a tiny Jamaican."
So we need some black cards with consecutive blanks (or "_ or _" or "_ and _").
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2014 Apr 30 at 12:40 PDT
— Ed. 2014 Apr 30 at 12:47 PDT
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NatureJay
SJA: Commander of Ruthless Abuse
2005 Mar 22 • 1871
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Nezumi said: SuperJer said: This makes me even more want to include vocal style suggestions for some cards.
"Intone this card reverently, like a king is burying his baby son."
"I'm sorry that I didn't like you, little guy."
I'm fine with tonal cards as long as you aren't asking me to sing or rap things I don't want to sing or rap.
Nezumi said:
Also, thinking about Jay's "Every man who is not _, _, or _ etc." card made me realize how good that format is for putting a verb/noun combo (like 'adopting a romanian baby') in the first space. It makes it sound like the verb applies to the other blanks. It works with some other cards too, like "...a refreshing douche of sprite, more blood, or a tiny Jamaican."
So we need some black cards with consecutive blanks (or "_ or _" or "_ and _").
I know, I was thinking that when you posted your test run of my cards. As you said, both the lists of just "or"s or the partial fill-in-the-blanks like the seven deadly sins one seem to create some interesting effects.
I'm trying to think of other authors that write with a lot of parataxis, but the only one I can think of offhand tends to have sentences that go on for pages. Also he's kind of crazy. But I'll take a look this evening at some point and see if he has anything that fits the form.
I'm also thinking, riffing off the tonal bit from earlier, that we could probably stand to have more cards that have an emotional charge to them. We've been dipping deeply into more philosophical cards, and that can generate some unusual statements, but they're a little self-contained and some variety could be appreciated.
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2014 Apr 30 at 14:16 PDT
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NatureJay
SJA: Commander of Ruthless Abuse
2005 Mar 22 • 1871
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I just ran superjer's card testing machine and this popped out.
Quote: Who needs a giant brain with four faces but no limbs and the properties of dwarfs when this sentence can do the job of both?
NO NO NO NO NO NO
And then, as if inspired by Nezrumi's remarks, the machine spat me this
Quote: Every man who is not firing a volley of muskets into a dark room, an old hornet, or an enjoyable life is the slave of some woman or other.
I'm now really happy with that card.
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2014 Apr 30 at 14:41 PDT
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Nezumi
Asshole Admin
2005 Mar 26 • 783
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NatureJay said: Who needs a giant brain with four faces but no limbs and the properties of dwarfs when this sentence can do the job of both?
lol! This may be the twistiest sentence SAH has ever produced.
TBH the philosophical cards kinda bug me. Some, like "There is no greater solitude than _ unless it is that of a tiger in the jungle." can be fun because they make silly nonsense, but I think we have just way too many of them.
I think the problem is that a lot of cards like "I ask that you judge me by _ I have made." simply lack a certain critical specificality.
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2014 Apr 30 at 15:54 PDT
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Nezumi said: So we need some black cards with consecutive blanks (or "_ or _" or "_ and _").
This. And more black cards that relate the blanks in a unique way, like... uh...
The tastiest part of _ is _.
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2014 Apr 30 at 16:01 PDT
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Nezumi said: I think the problem is that a lot of cards like "I ask that you judge me by _ I have made." simply lack a certain critical specificality.
Feel free to suggest specificality modifications to the cards at your convenience.
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2014 Apr 30 at 16:04 PDT
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Wow. This got deep really fast:
The tastiest part of circumstance is moral ambiguity.
The tastiest part of the last breath of a dying man is the wool over my eyes.
And then gross:
The tastiest part of crotchless panties is throwing up in an autistic woman's lap.
The tastiest part of my first wife is a pus tornado.
The tastiest part of the body is a milky sweat bead.
And then darkly optimistic:
The tastiest part of dying in captivity is a hearty 8-pound pork roast.
The tastiest part of a human-sized harness is a reliable source of income.
The tastiest part of one night in Bangkok is naval victory.
And then it insulted me for refreshing too much:
The tastiest part of your signature manoeuvre is reduced brain intelligence.
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2014 Apr 30 at 16:08 PDT
— Ed. 2014 Apr 30 at 16:13 PDT
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NatureJay
SJA: Commander of Ruthless Abuse
2005 Mar 22 • 1871
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Nezumi said: TBH the philosophical cards kinda bug me. Some, like "There is no greater solitude than _ unless it is that of a tiger in the jungle." can be fun because they make silly nonsense, but I think we have just way too many of them.
I think the problem is that a lot of cards like "I ask that you judge me by _ I have made." simply lack a certain critical specificality.
The "no greater solitude" card is taken from Le Samouraï and appears on the screen as supposedly a quote from Bushido, though the quote itself is just bullshit the director made up, which is probably my favorite thing about the card.
We can possibly gain some context from not turning certain things into blanks, like that card that ended in "or fruit", the trouble is that they get really awkward to read back particularly when you're laughing from how the blank has played out. Maybe the solution is just to switch the position of the two, keeping the fruit but ending on the blank.
But yes, more cards that have a context.
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2014 Apr 30 at 16:14 PDT
— Ed. 2014 Apr 30 at 16:19 PDT
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Shouldn't the solitude/tiger card be:
"There is no greater solitude than that of _ unless it is that of a tiger in the jungle."
I mean, in a way I like how it is. But it makes no sense.
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2014 Apr 30 at 16:21 PDT
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NatureJay
SJA: Commander of Ruthless Abuse
2005 Mar 22 • 1871
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SuperJer said: Shouldn't the solitude/tiger card be:
"There is no greater solitude than that of _ unless it is that of a tiger in the jungle."
I mean, in a way I like how it is. But it makes no sense.
That's how it is in the original. fixit fixit fixit fixit fixit fixit.... fixit fixit fixit!
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2014 Apr 30 at 16:22 PDT
— Ed. 2014 Apr 30 at 16:22 PDT
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NatureJay said: Maybe the solution is just to switch the position of the two, keeping the fruit but ending on the blank.
I think laughing and then eventually blurting out "or fruit" actually works pretty well. It is more problemal when there are a lot of words after the last blank.
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2014 Apr 30 at 16:22 PDT
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NatureJay said: SuperJer said: Shouldn't the solitude/tiger card be:
"There is no greater solitude than that of _ unless it is that of a tiger in the jungle."
I mean, in a way I like how it is. But it makes no sense.
That's how it is in the original. fixit fixit fixit fixit fixit fixit.... fixit fixit fixit! So what do you really want?
Also why is it "unless"? Is that a translation thing? I should think it would be " except that of a tiger in the jungle."
"Unless" makes it sound like the blank belongs to the tiger, which is totally bizarre.
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2014 Apr 30 at 16:25 PDT
— Ed. 2014 Apr 30 at 16:26 PDT
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NatureJay
SJA: Commander of Ruthless Abuse
2005 Mar 22 • 1871
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Quote: There is no greater solitude than that of the samurai unless it is that of the tiger in the jungle... Perhaps...
— Bushido (Book of the Samurai)
That's how it appears on the screen, I don't think it's a translation issue either. The card needs to mimic the structure of the original because that's the only way that the grammar is going to be not-icky.
I think a comma between the blank and unless would make it seem more natural. I always feel a pause there when I say it.
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2014 Apr 30 at 16:28 PDT
— Ed. 2014 Apr 30 at 16:30 PDT
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The "Perhaps..." makes the unless make a little more sense to me. In that it clarifies that he wasn't quite sure about the samurai part.
I don't think it should go on the card, though.
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2014 Apr 30 at 16:47 PDT
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NatureJay
SJA: Commander of Ruthless Abuse
2005 Mar 22 • 1871
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Okay, I spent most of my shift at work thinking about new black cards that showed a more distinct relationship between the white cards and these are some of my results.
These wounds were given to me by the beast of legend. Part of it was _, part was _, and it was crowned with _.
Test cases:
Quote: These wounds were given to me by the beast of legend. Part of it was destroying their home planet, part was an electron sex party, and it was crowned with something I just hate.
These wounds were given to me by the beast of legend. Part of it was an injection, part was a technicality, and it was crowned with a demand from the king.
These wounds were given to me by the beast of legend. Part of it was a burst of energy, part was a difficult Canadian, and it was crowned with a lonely old man.
These wounds were given to me by the beast of legend. Part of it was baseless hatred, part was being shot at while fleeing, and it was crowned with MY SKULL!
These wounds were given to me by the beast of legend. Part of it was a nation of damsels, part was prodding, and it was crowned with M. Night Shyamalan-a-ding-dong.
Early, informal rugby had three primary rules: that the ball should be carried as _, points be scored by crossing _, and at no time should _ appear on the field.
Test cases:
Quote: Early, informal rugby had three primary rules: that the ball should be carried as a war canoe, points be scored by crossing wings, and at no time should an upstart appear on the field.
Early, informal rugby had three primary rules: that the ball should be carried as a lonely grave, points be scored by crossing smooth boys, and at no time should a dragon made of motorcycle appear on the field.
Early, informal rugby had three primary rules: that the ball should be carried as a stiff upper lip, points be scored by crossing a Swiss murder suit, and at no time should the only thing left appear on the field.
Early, informal rugby had three primary rules: that the ball should be carried as a falling tree, points be scored by crossing a tribal village, and at no time should big pants appear on the field.
Early, informal rugby had three primary rules: that the ball should be carried as vital developments, points be scored by crossing the southwest corner, and at no time should wriggly little worms appear on the field.
It works all right, but it doesn't play well with rando testing as the grammar is more suited to certain constructions.
Third one!
Looking at the fossil record of the family, you can see the development of _, now iconic, as well as the decline of _ to vestigiality.
Test cases:
Quote: Looking at the fossil record of the family, you can see the development of turtles that have to pee, now iconic, as well as the decline of something equivalent to vestigiality.
Looking at the fossil record of the family, you can see the development of transvestite cosplay, now iconic, as well as the decline of knowing what to do to vestigiality.
Looking at the fossil record of the family, you can see the development of racist bullshit, now iconic, as well as the decline of what I should have said to vestigiality.
Looking at the fossil record of the family, you can see the development of giving it a tweak, now iconic, as well as the decline of steers and queers to vestigiality.
Looking at the fossil record of the family, you can see the development of wailing, now iconic, as well as the decline of a hunky, Adonis-like male figure to vestigiality.
I think that card is a fucking winner.
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2014 Apr 30 at 22:21 PDT
— Ed. 2014 Apr 30 at 22:26 PDT
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NatureJay
SJA: Commander of Ruthless Abuse
2005 Mar 22 • 1871
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seriously this card
Quote: Looking at the fossil record of the family, you can see the development of a winking hole, now iconic, as well as the decline of the mighty moon-worm to vestigiality.
or perhaps I just keep hitting the 2fer lottery
Quote: Looking at the fossil record of the family, you can see the development of getting on top, and staying on top, now iconic, as well as the decline of spooning distance to vestigiality.
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2014 Apr 30 at 23:03 PDT
— Ed. 2014 May 1 at 15:15 PDT
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White card: Kissing ass with your dick.
I was walking through the water, thinking about spiders.
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2014 May 1 at 19:42 PDT
— Ed. 2014 May 1 at 19:42 PDT
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I like all three, NatureBones. Esp the beast one. Crowned with MY SKULL! really got me, though.
I think if 2-3fers do well at all with rando, they should be fine with humans.
Also - did that cookie say "kicking ass with your dick?"
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2014 May 1 at 20:04 PDT
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I was thinking about neutrons, and maybe we can have a relational twofer about them?
Being unstable while free, _ will decay with a half-life of 10 minutes into _ and an electron.
Well, gosh:
Being unstable while free, Woman 2.0 will decay with a half-life of 10 minutes into fighting your family and an electron.
Being unstable while free, a fishy substance will decay with a half-life of 10 minutes into none more and an electron.
Being unstable while free, many people will decay with a half-life of 10 minutes into a promise and an electron.
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2014 May 1 at 20:10 PDT
— Ed. 2014 May 1 at 20:15 PDT
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aaronjer
*****'n Admin
2005 Mar 21 • 4940
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"A horizontal ass crack"
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2014 May 1 at 20:12 PDT
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NatureJay
SJA: Commander of Ruthless Abuse
2005 Mar 22 • 1871
574 ₧
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SuperJer said:
Also - did that cookie say "kicking ass with your dick?"
Well who hasn't used their dick as a makeshift blackjack when shit got a bit too real?
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2014 May 2 at 01:00 PDT
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