My First Song

My First Song

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jacksmoke234
Tendrils McGee

2005 Mar 21 • 1375
34 ₧
Well we had to write a song for English today so I decided to write this one. I want feedback please!
Verse 1:
You put me through so much,
But I still stay with you.
I'm afraid to be,
The only one without you.
I can't stand sitting here all alone
When I could be with you

Chorus:
But I'm all alone
Waiting for that special someone
You used to be
The only one for me, but

Verse 2:
I'm over you now.
I can't be with you now
You put me through so much
But I finally broke
Away from you

Chorus:
But I'm all alone
Waiting for that special someone
You used to be
The only one for me, but

Break:
I'm lost and confused, but I'm better off without you
I'm lost and confused, but I'm better off without you

Ending:
Now as I sit here
Thinking of that special someone.
I still think back on all the great times we had,
but too bad, its over now

Chorus:
But I'm all alone
Waiting for that special someone
You used to be
The only one for me, but
Its over now
 
 
 
2005 May 5 at 03:03 UTC

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Generic.
 
 
 
2005 May 5 at 03:10 UTC
NatureJay
SJA: Commander of Ruthless Abuse

Good Conduct Medal
2005 Mar 23 • 1871
574 ₧
Ribbon's darts of criticism fly true. It's not bad, but there have been a bunch of songs like it, and there will continue to be more as time goes on.
100% natural, no antibiotics, and bloodgrass-fed
 
 
 
2005 May 5 at 03:36 UTC
jacksmoke234
Tendrils McGee

2005 Mar 21 • 1375
34 ₧
Yea, I kinda figured, I wrote it in about 10 minutes :-\....
 
 
 
2005 May 5 at 12:41 UTC
echidna3
Captain Signupnow

Most Australian Medal
2005 Apr 4 • -201
if you spent 30 or 60 mins, maybe you could write a good song
i dont like signatures. although there are some good ones out there
 
 
 
2005 May 5 at 14:34 UTC
jacksmoke234
Tendrils McGee

2005 Mar 21 • 1375
34 ₧
I only had 10 minutes in class to write it
 
 
 
2005 May 5 at 23:46 UTC
SuperJer
Websiteman

2005 Mar 21 • 6643
Excuse me while I steal those lyrics and record a song...
 
 
 
2005 May 6 at 01:00 UTC
a_banana
He's an Ug_Man!

2005 May 3 • -591
im sure it is good enough for super to get reconised, and launch himself in to a life of fame and fortune, driving himself deeper in to the capitalistic bowels of our over worked body of government and pop culture..

then he probly will burn out in a mater of minutes. but anyway the song is ok.
<superjer> What? It is? Where? Huh? Hey -- scones!
 
 
 
2005 May 6 at 01:24 UTC
NatureJay
SJA: Commander of Ruthless Abuse

Good Conduct Medal
2005 Mar 23 • 1871
574 ₧
Sovjet Umen should do a cover of it.... actually, they've already done some totally hot love songs.
100% natural, no antibiotics, and bloodgrass-fed
 
 
 
2005 May 6 at 03:30 UTC
echidna3
Captain Signupnow

Most Australian Medal
2005 Apr 4 • -201
it sorta helps if u spell it right
i dont like signatures. although there are some good ones out there
 
 
 
2005 May 6 at 09:40 UTC
a_banana
He's an Ug_Man!

2005 May 3 • -591
are you raly one to talk about spelling mastakes? i have seen many in your post's
<superjer> What? It is? Where? Huh? Hey -- scones!
 
 
 
2005 May 6 at 18:38 UTC
NatureJay
SJA: Commander of Ruthless Abuse

Good Conduct Medal
2005 Mar 23 • 1871
574 ₧
It goes both ways.
100% natural, no antibiotics, and bloodgrass-fed
 
 
 
2005 May 6 at 21:11 UTC
echidna3
Captain Signupnow

Most Australian Medal
2005 Apr 4 • -201
i spell wrong on purpose, bcos im too lazy
i dont like signatures. although there are some good ones out there
 
 
 
2005 May 6 at 22:51 UTC
a_banana
He's an Ug_Man!

2005 May 3 • -591
oh me too, and im not good at spelling.
<superjer> What? It is? Where? Huh? Hey -- scones!
 
 
 
2005 May 7 at 02:05 UTC
echidna3
Captain Signupnow

Most Australian Medal
2005 Apr 4 • -201
suuuuure
i dont like signatures. although there are some good ones out there
 
 
 
2005 May 7 at 23:50 UTC
a_banana
He's an Ug_Man!

2005 May 3 • -591
ya... i cant spell worth crap
<superjer> What? It is? Where? Huh? Hey -- scones!
 
 
 
2005 May 8 at 00:44 UTC
echidna3
Captain Signupnow

Most Australian Medal
2005 Apr 4 • -201
absolutely true. and correct your fucking grammar too
i dont like signatures. although there are some good ones out there
 
 
 
2005 May 9 at 07:29 UTC
a_banana
He's an Ug_Man!

2005 May 3 • -591
ya why do you need to try to rub it in? it's not like this is english class or somthing. and your grammer is not the best either.
<superjer> What? It is? Where? Huh? Hey -- scones!
 
 
 
2005 May 10 at 01:22 UTC
jacksmoke234
Tendrils McGee

2005 Mar 21 • 1375
34 ₧
Correction
This is English?
 
 
 
2005 May 10 at 02:59 UTC
a_banana
He's an Ug_Man!

2005 May 3 • -591
what?
<superjer> What? It is? Where? Huh? Hey -- scones!
 
 
 
2005 May 10 at 21:04 UTC
echidna3
Captain Signupnow

Most Australian Medal
2005 Apr 4 • -201
i agree with mr smoke
i dont like signatures. although there are some good ones out there
 
 
 
2005 May 13 at 10:59 UTC
a_banana
He's an Ug_Man!

2005 May 3 • -591
no suprise. i would think you would agree with your girlfriend.
<superjer> What? It is? Where? Huh? Hey -- scones!
 
 
 
2005 May 14 at 21:04 UTC

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What?!

*slaps Mr. Smoke*

I can't believe you!

*storms off*
 
 
 
2005 May 14 at 21:07 UTC
a_banana
He's an Ug_Man!

2005 May 3 • -591
ummm that was weard.
<superjer> What? It is? Where? Huh? Hey -- scones!
 
 
 
2005 May 14 at 21:10 UTC
echidna3
Captain Signupnow

Most Australian Medal
2005 Apr 4 • -201
what the fuck is weard?
i dont like signatures. although there are some good ones out there
 
 
 
2005 May 15 at 09:42 UTC
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